Writing as a Recursive Process

Rough

Final

After looking over my rough draft in preparation for my final Gee and Cuddy essay date, i realized how i present the idea of Cuddy’s fake it til you make it could be changed to flow better with the rest of my ideas. I revised my draft to help the reader understand my point of view compared to Cuddy’s. This also cuts out all most of summary which at first i thought helped strengthen Cuddy’s points, but at a second glance is not really needed to convey the ideas that she had, but more of how she came to those ideas. This is not needed in my essay, and would just serve to make my essay longer than it needs to be. Specifying that it is Cuddy’s ideas that i am talking about helps guide the reader to my main points and thoughts about her ideas.

Integrate Ideas with Those of Others

After looking at my comments i can humbly agree that my rough draft suffered from enormous paragraphs with no breaks to break up my thoughts and ideas. I thought that since my the barclays paragraph was long that it was alright to keep it like that since it had the right format. What i did not expect was that my body paragraphs would consist of 2 paragraphs that were more than a page each. This is not the way to show the reader clean cut ideas, what i did in my final draft was the use of block quotations to break up my thoughts and lead to the next idea.

Active Reading, Critical Reading, and informal Reading Response

 

From the start until the year until now my progress in my annotations has doubled. I started out as just underlining, and had the mindset that putting comments or ideas or questions was too much work and i thought that i already understood it so i did not need to add the extra work. But as i began to understand the text more, i started to put my ideas and write how ideas connected to other papers we were working on in class. This helped develop my skill to bring ideas together.

Critique Own and Others’ Work

There is always something to improve on when looking over and writing an essay. When i comment on the papers of my peer group, i try to provide information that can actually help them improve their essay or help the argument they are trying to work towards. In my essay i included a snip of a part of my essay that i took out in the final draft. This example of Discourses was not needed to describe my idea. This is because it would make more sense to provide an analysis of my idea, not just an example of it.

Document Work Using Appropriate Conventions (MLA)

These screenshots are examples of correct MLA formatted and provide a clear example of how to put a Block quote, along with bracket, and an embedded quotation. The use of these in an essay provide a variety of ways to convey information from the text. The gives the reader a relief from regular given information, it also helps distinguish or cut one idea from another by providing space. There could be more of these type of ways of relief for the reader in my final draft, it helps keep the flow without just stating information for 4 pages.

Control Individual Error Patterns

These are from the final and rough draft of my Gee and Cuddy essay. The first picture depicts a block paragraph that is difficult to read due to the shear amount of information in it. The picture below it shows this same paragraph but broken up into a block quotation. This puts emphasis on the idea at hand, it also provides an easy way to read a point i am making in my essay.