Part 1

In my essay in include two scholarly sources that help push and help building along the idea that student identity shifts happen often, and can be heavily influenced by sponsors. From the beginning i mention the idea of sponsors, this idea can be seen throughout my essay. I believe my peers think that i would be adding to Brandt’s idea of a sponsor. I talk about sponsors as the root of or the main cause of an identity shift. I relate this to how a person will have many sponsors over their lifetime, therefore causing multiple or many identity shifts. In my essay i affirm with Williams’s ideas of  what an identity shift is in a student’s literacy narrative. His classification of this type of narrative aligns with my explanation in my essay. This is because i believe and agree with what he is saying. In the essay, my peers could easily see the connection between both Brandt, and Wiliams, but also see how i treat their ideas differently. In Alexander’s text, there are ideas that could be incorporated into my draft, but where to bring his ideas into the essay is the difficult part. Pushing that amount of information might be an overload in such an essay, but surely some of his ideas could be included into the next draft.

Part 2

   Introduction   

                 When a student writes a literacy narrative, they have an opportunity to see how an event growing up, can shape the rest of their life. Literacy narratives most often are related to the issues that a student has with their identity. This is a shift in the person’s attitude throughout their narrative, changing from one type of thinking to another. This change could be caused by a sponsor withholding literacy from the student, forcing them to adapt to the challenge. These ideas can both be strengthened and held in a greater light, by both Williams and Brandt.  A shifting identity is common in a literacy narrative, that a student is changed for the better or worse due to their literacy experiences.

Introducing a sentence that includes both of the texts in bring into my paper, sounds easy at first, but not when you have an already made introduction that sounds worse no matter how smooth you try to make it. It does make sense why the texts that you use in the essay, have to be introduced, in the intro paragraph. With this sentence, even if it can be fixed, makes the essay more informative and shows the reader what to expect before reading the whole thing. This is also practice for the future, due to the introduction and conclusion being the biggest portions of importance. There is almost an art to the perfect one sentence introductions. This new sentence in the intro paragraph helps the reader glide from the first paragraph to the last knowing what my essay is directly about without revealing all of my talking points and main ideas.

Part 3

In Tevin Francois Literacy Narrative, he describes himself bullsh*ting his way through most of his high school career, only to contribute his change of heart to one of his sponsors, his mom.

Another Literacy Narrative by Julie McGarvey highlights her ability to weather her English teacher with a known reputation for being difficult to impress.

These are my two introductions to the two Literacy Narratives that i use in my essay. I introduce the author and then describe what happened in their narrative. From there on i relate their experiences to my points in the essay. What i do not do is provide the title of their narrative along with the other descriptions of their story. The reason that i did not first include them was that i could not find a way to make them sound smooth as i introduce them. It sounded better to just include their name and what happened to them. If i were to include the titles of these narratives i would have to put them in the beginning of the sentence for example

In Tevin Francois Literacy Narrative, Books add Life over Ball, he describes himself bullsh*ting his way through most of his high school career, only to contribute his change of heart to one of his sponsors, his mom.

Another Literacy Narrative, called Sixty?, by Julie McGarvey highlights her ability to weather her English teacher with a known reputation for being difficult to impress.

Part 4

When further looking through the scholarly texts of Brandt i was able to find a story of two people that go through life on two very different spectrums. On page 560 and 561 Brandt describes a man named Raymond who grows up in a high-end place in society, and ends up a successful freelance software writer. She also describes a lady named Dora who was born Mexican american, living on a border town in Texas. The story of these two is that they both attended the same university, but had a very different path to get there. Have been born into a “high-end socioeconomic family profile” Raymond does not have to go through life constantly learning new technology and information. While Dora has had to go through many jobs and learning processes to learn the same information. While not going through the same thing as Dora, Raymond is less cultured because of it. Dora has been through many identity shifts due to her many job and work experiences, “She has to reach much further afield for the material and communicative systems to support her learning.” She has a greater relationship through learning compared to Raymond, this can be seen through her only option of finding literacy is through her own search for knowledge.ollreadwrit2a