Annotation Explanation

I annotated this because this is the example that foreshadows his conclusion about how the girl’s Dominant Secondary Discourse effects her Primary Discourse. This also shows Gee’s point about how she is what we call natural talent, this is what it develops it.

This annotation is important because Gee is showing how Discourse cannot be absent from things such as Values, Assumptions, and Beliefs. This makes sense because this is what makes each Discourse unique and why it is difficult to get into one.

This annotation comes from when Gee breaks down what natural talent actually is. It is what makes sense, practice from a young age in which makes the person have a step ahead of those who done. This is where Transferring and Filtering come into play when going from Discourse to Discourse.

This annotation explains the idea that children draw from secondary Discourses while currently in their Primary Discourse. This makes sense to develop their Primary Discourse because a child can be influenced by many things when they grow up that shapes them into who they are.

Peer Review Feedback

After reading my peer comments i can now see from a different perspective how to improve my paper. The comments i got from my group mates make sense and are things that i might consider working into my paper.

A comment that i got was that i should rearrange some of the sentences to put them in a spot that makes sense relative to the other sentences. For example the start of my second paragraph i introduce the titles of each paper, when this should be in the intro paragraph. This makes sense because it would give the reader an understanding of who Gee and Cuddy actually are and where i am getting my information.

This next set of comments focuses on how i can expand further on some of the ideas that i present in my intro and in my body paragraphs. For example i made a point about Cuddy’s car crash early in her college career and how that affected her confidence in her schooling due to her injury. But i did not explain how this made her believe that she was set up for failure, which is a pretty big point that made her eventually meet with her mentor to get her advice. This key point would make my argument even stronger since this is a main point i make.

This next point that the comments i got made was that i have very big paragraphs with many ideas stashed in them. The comment i got was that i should break up my paragraphs into smaller for more concise detail. This makes sense because as a reader, trying to make sense of a huge paragraph can get them lost in information. By breaking them up i could add more detail which i need to do to make stronger points.

Returning to Gee (13-17)

After further reading more pages from Gee, i can see that there are a couple concepts that i could introduce to support my argument that i make. On page 13 Gee describes a Mushfake Discourse, which means “partial acquisition coupled with meta-knowledge and strategies to “make do”( Gee 13). A Mushfake is someone that makes do with what they have to enter a Discourse. This is the the same thing if not related to faking it until you make it, and a pretender. These are my main talking points and ideas that i present in my essay through my barclay’s paragraphs and my intro. The next thing that could incorporate is the idea from Gee on page 16 that says that Discourses are unique in the way that they all have their own way of doing things. They always have to have a certain values, assumptions and beliefs that are tied to them that are unique. That is why certain ones are harder to get into opposed to others with a broad opinion about something. This can be seen in different friend groups from another. These groups with have different social aspects such as jokes and how you act around them. This makes sense with the main point in my essay because i say that it is fine to fake it up to a point but then after it is impossible. Once you become known as apart of that group you have to also go with the things that makes that group friends, and that is hard to be the same.

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